Tagline: Beethoven writes a poem for his lover in the form of a sonata.
Words:118
Comments welcome.
NOTE: The poem is a sonnet - 14, 10 syllable lines with rhyme scheme ABAB CDCD EFEF GG. It usually takes a turn called a "volta" around 8 or nine lines in and resolves the issue by the end.
Allegro
Our love, a melody, a sprightly aire,
bright lively notes that set our spirits free.
Two hearts as one regaled in rhythmic flair,
we dance before the music gods with glee.
Adagio
The lake a serenade beneath the moon
shines gentle rays upon thy comely face,
while here inside a veiled pristine lagoon
lips touch and kiss in passionate embrace.
Finale
Our courtship fails conventions of the day
and prudish gentry's law bids us to part.
Our loins afire, would that thou might stay
and still the sorrow rising in my heart.
Coda
No earthly man nor gods who reign above
shall ere dispel the music of our love. 💗
So poignant! You have mad poetry skills, Lenny. 👏👏👏 Loved it.
ReplyDeleteHi, a very interesting take on the prompt. Eternal love put in a rhythm or rhyme that makes the poetry unforgettable. Shalom aleichem
ReplyDeleteThis is such a beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing it with us, Lenny.
ReplyDeleteHi Lenny - this is brilliant - and perhaps Shakespearean in its discourse ... superb - I'll be back to re-read. Gosh I wish I could write poems like this ... definitely a chocolate-peanut-butter-cookie or two or more coming in your direction ... really clever. Fantastic ... cheers and big hugs GrandBlogMom ...
ReplyDeleteLovely! The "conventions of the day" so often make things difficult. Well done!
ReplyDeleteHilary said it best - brilliant, just brilliant. Excellent!
ReplyDeleteDespairing and hopeful at the same time. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI like your take on the prompt. A love poem in song. I wouldn't have thought of that.
ReplyDeleteNancy
Sonnets are hard to write, and you did this one so well! You even used the kind of language he'd write, and breaking it up into musical movements is just brilliant. A great tribute to their romance!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the clever combination of sonnet and music, and the fiery, yet ill-fated romance.
ReplyDeleteThank you Lenny. I felt I was reading a sonnet of yore ... very Shakespearean. Suits the music for sure! Very clever!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written, Lenny. I could actually hear Beethoven reciting this to his love. The manner of speech is spot on for that time. Very well done!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful... your well-crafted sonnet fits perfectly!
ReplyDeleteWelll done!
Wow, Lenny! You did a wonderful job!
ReplyDeleteThe previous comment was from blom
ReplyDeleteExcellent execution, and period language is just the right touch. Well done!
ReplyDeleteHaunting and beautiful.
ReplyDeleteYour poem was beautifully written and a wonderful take on the prompt!
ReplyDeleteOoo. Well done. Inspired by both the Bard and the great composer.
ReplyDeleteThis was such a great prompt. It inspired me to participate in the WEP challenge this month.
Mary at Play off the Page
A fantastically fitting take on the prompt. Well done.
ReplyDeleteVery well crafted, apt for the prompt. Music and poetry go hand in hand.
ReplyDeleteThis is moving poetry, Lenny. You're so talented!
ReplyDeleteAnd I love the redecorating -- great color scheme and best of all, no furniture. Clean-hands high five.
Beautifully written. Clever to use the musical terms for the verses.
ReplyDeleteThis is really beautiful! Brief, but packs a powerful punch.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant! Pretty sure Beethoven would use it if he were still alive.
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